BF3 Extreme Pizza Mission

[HaremAbaddon]

Feel free to see my rather strange Machinima from the game Battlefield 3 I care about your opinion because this is one of my first films of this type.

Any feedback will be very useful for me.

[jimykx]

Well, It's quite... random. The plot's line is quite hard to follow, if there is one at all, and the "funny" feels way too forced. The soundtrack seems to be well chosen but I cant' confirm since I didn't really understand what was exactly going on and what expressions/feelings was I supposed to be feeling. It just felt confusing. I also feel like you should do a better job in handling the different sound volumes, because their volume fluctuates a lot making it sometimes aggressive to the listener (The skype sound and some voices/speech). What I mean by this is that you should make these more aggressive sounds sound slightly lower. Also what's with the random face appearing around? I don't know whoever that is.

[HaremAbaddon]

Thanks for the feedback dude. I have a terrible tendency to attach too much attention to the results. Very often, it all makes the whole story is lost in the influx of sick random scenes. Our English by the way is pretty low, so we can go a little practice Next movie will be better..... I guess ;p

[jimykx]

I'm pretty sure your next movie could be much better just by you focusing more on a plot/story. At least something more interesting. I mean, of course It can be random, take the example of the iconic asdfmovies, but those were made to be random, but your movie just feels like it was a weak plot with some forced-funny randomness attached to it. So you need to work on stronger plot ideas. I'm pretty sure just that is going to make the whole thing that much better. Unless you're actually aiming for randomness